Dear Dr. Forman,
For my next essay I will make my ideas flow in a better way,
and create a better analysis for my textual support. I noticed that my
concluding paragraph was very repetitive since I had said things in a very
similar way before it. For my next concluding paragraph I will wrap up my ideas
by incorporating new thoughts that can be related to the thesis but also will
still prove my point. In addition, I will proofread more and also attempt to
not have any small grammar mistakes.
10 / 7 / 13 -- I am currently working on expanding my essay and proving the main point through more comments I'm adding. Also, I'm arranging my essay in a more organized way.
What more than anything else would you like to improve on in your next essay? Sentence writing? Ideas?
ReplyDeleteI would mostly like to improve the flow of the content, make better paragraph connections and incorporate better examples.
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